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  1. Hey Tumo - I was with you until the end scene; is the dead guy with the umbrella in him 'another' dead guy, so not the dead guy in the dentist's chair? If so, I think this is confusing (me at least!) because it's coming so soon after the reveal that the detective is a figment of the murderous dentist's imagination. Also - the umbrella now feels strange to me - like it's any old murder weapon; isn't it a surprise enough that the detective isn't real? Shouldn't the umbrella be the murder weapon that kills the guy in the dentist's chair?

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